Tuesday, January 10, 2012

Correct any grammatical error please?

I don't get the latter half of the first sentence in its technical sense, so no comment there. As for the second sentence, I think you should do away with 'basically', since it doesn't really contribute to the sentence meaning-wise. Also, get rid of the second 'and then'. Replace it with something like 'after which'.

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